If it makes you feel any better, I think you’re a great writer.
That scene in the Yale bookshop came to life in my head as I read it. You browsing around the shelves and coming across The Catcher in the Rye – one of my favourite books also.
Before I leave you it has been said, that J D Salinger was a bit of a scaredy-cat, he wrote a book, a brilliant book, that touched the heart of millions of people and then he kind of slid off the radar. Some say that he was fearful of failing and that’s he never attempted publishing again.
Good luck with your writing